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I've gotta say, I was sceptical at the beginning, but I'm glad I carried on reading! "jig of time" didn't really work for me, and I think that's what put me off a bit, so I think this could use some work. The alliteration sort of... carries your mind away, it makes it quite dreamy, which I really like. And the contrast with the quote bit works really well. Nice one!

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Thank you! My biggest difficulty with this was trying to keep it focused on one theme while maintaining the alliterations. Harder than it looks! Does the piece sound coherent? I was worried that the end may seem to be too drastic of a change and appear unrelated. Thanks again!

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I like the alliterations at the beginning... lol definatly an inspiring idea for a poem style. Dunno if it was intentional, but intriguing nonetheless.

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"Life is a Banquet and most sons of bitches are starving to death!"
-Mame

"Love is me gently leading you back to yourself."
- Anon.

Thank you!

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Mm, pretty coherent. I didn't get exactly what you meant, but poetry is meant to be open to interpretation. I felt that it was about the creation of man, but it did take me a couple of reads and a dictionary! You've got a great vocabulary, by the way!

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Yep, open it is.

Creation of man, eh? That's an interesting take! I never thought of it that way. I was thinking more along the line of, "even in the imperfection of mankind's reasoning and philosophy, God makes himself manifest, despite how cryptic of a manifestation that may be". I had a hard time getting my thoughts in though, so I can just barely manage to still interpret what I meant. (A lot of times, I intend to write about one topic, write a poem, and then decide re-interpret it some other way that makes more sense. I'm as much a reader as I am a writer. )

Thank you! Interestingly enough, I seem to know words that many people don't, while I don't know the words that most people know. The dictionary is my friend, except when I'm too lazy to use it. (In other words, we aren't that close. Thank God for context clues! )

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